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Peggy Holman's avatar

Strong story, great characters and excellent writing. Well done!

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Jeremy P. Madsen's avatar

Thank you!

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Jay Logan's avatar

I enjoyed this story. Well done, if not a bit sad.

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Jeremy P. Madsen's avatar

Thanks! Yes, it's sad. And I even dialed the sad parts back a little from the original draft.

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DM Andrews's avatar

Again, very well written. I'm always fascinated by the style of other writers. Would you say this story is typical of your style of writing? (I've not read you other works yet). Have you read John Gwynne? Your style reminds me of him a little.

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Jeremy P. Madsen's avatar

I would say this story is fairly representative of my style in regards to sentence structure, paragraph structure, description, POV, word choice, etc.

In regards to themes and general tone, this story leans more on the serious/sad/reflective side of what I prefer to write. (My novelette, "The Aquamancer's Secret," leans more on the funny/witty/quirky side, with my debut novel, The Pyromancer's Scroll, in the middle.)

Worldbuilding makes its way into all my stories. This one focuses on some geographic, cultural, and technological worldbuilding. I normally have more screen time for magic systems and various species, but the narrow focus of this story did not leave room for that.

I haven't heard of John Gwynne. I'll check him out. Would you say his books are clean?

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DM Andrews's avatar

I've read just one of his books - The Shadow of the Gods. I don't remember anything bad in it, but it was a few years ago and I have a bad memory. I wouldn't have finished it if it was too filled with bad things... I'd describe his style as somewhat like a saga writer. I personally prefer a little more lightness and humour - so I'll have to give your other works a try ;)

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