That moment at the end of her coronation was a very late addition to the scene, and actually a reversal from the original draft (where the emphasis is that Adara DOESN'T feel any different after she's coronated).
I decided that it was important to both Adara and the reader to provide this glimpse of the heavens early in the book, as a counterpoint to the picture we get of Archivous in the prologue.
1). I'm only responsible for one of those two continents. You are fuly to blame for the other one. Why you ever moved to a stuffy, humid place like Larrisa is beyond me.
II. Since when did *I* make you use all caps? You imposed that "orthodontic catastrophe" on you'reself.
After Volthorn's failure seven years ago, he places a big focus on protecting others and performing his duty. Volthorn is a better leader because of his past failures. Yes, he is being more vigilant in protecting Adara, but he is also more forgiving of others mistakes, like when he forgives the officer after the armory is burned.
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A golden boat with a rising sun on the Fortune Bringer could signify the color of hope, a new dawn for Elandria. But then Volthorn mentions that the gold will soon be stripped and melted down. Is this a foreshadowing of events to come? A hint of shattered hopes and dreams? Or perhaps it signifies that all things must CHANGE and TRANSFORM to bring the greatest good!
You're totally right that Volthorn's failure 7 years ago has had a huge impact on his leadership style. In this chapter we see some of the positive effects.
I'm *sure* we won't see any negative effects in the rest of this book . . . :)
*****
For me, the stripping of the boat's plating is a tangible way of showing how the war is relentlessly beating Elandria down and slowly stripping it of its wealth, strength, and heritage.
I like the coronation image. The momentary glimpse to the otherworld of angels was a nice touch as well.
Thank you!
That moment at the end of her coronation was a very late addition to the scene, and actually a reversal from the original draft (where the emphasis is that Adara DOESN'T feel any different after she's coronated).
I decided that it was important to both Adara and the reader to provide this glimpse of the heavens early in the book, as a counterpoint to the picture we get of Archivous in the prologue.
May I just point out . . . .
Durrin's crime of "stealing" a horse was really just buying the horse at an unapproved discount.
Volthorn outright seizes some random person's horse in this chapter with barely a thought.
Hmm.
So when do I get my shortchanged shekels for that charcoal pencil you "borrowed"? Or was that "requisitioned for military use"?
You HAD to bring that up, didn't you.
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I'm borowing it. I'll return it. I promise.
You're TWO CONTINENTS AWAY!
And now you're making me use all caps. You know I *despise* all caps—they're an orthographic weapon from a less . . . civilized age.
Also, you misspelled "borrowing."
And that's my fault?
Ahem. Ambiguous antecedent.
The misspelling of "borrowing" was definitely your fault, but I doubt that's what you meant, oh buccaneering cousin of mine.
1). I'm only responsible for one of those two continents. You are fuly to blame for the other one. Why you ever moved to a stuffy, humid place like Larrisa is beyond me.
II. Since when did *I* make you use all caps? You imposed that "orthodontic catastrophe" on you'reself.
(c) I blame Substack's lack of a spell-chequer.
After Volthorn's failure seven years ago, he places a big focus on protecting others and performing his duty. Volthorn is a better leader because of his past failures. Yes, he is being more vigilant in protecting Adara, but he is also more forgiving of others mistakes, like when he forgives the officer after the armory is burned.
* * * * *
A golden boat with a rising sun on the Fortune Bringer could signify the color of hope, a new dawn for Elandria. But then Volthorn mentions that the gold will soon be stripped and melted down. Is this a foreshadowing of events to come? A hint of shattered hopes and dreams? Or perhaps it signifies that all things must CHANGE and TRANSFORM to bring the greatest good!
You're totally right that Volthorn's failure 7 years ago has had a huge impact on his leadership style. In this chapter we see some of the positive effects.
I'm *sure* we won't see any negative effects in the rest of this book . . . :)
*****
For me, the stripping of the boat's plating is a tangible way of showing how the war is relentlessly beating Elandria down and slowly stripping it of its wealth, strength, and heritage.